Jaden Yoshinaru (Incomplete)

Name: Yoshinaru, Jaden

Current Race: Shinigami

Rank: Captain 8th

Age: Actual(345)/Appears(24)

Gender: Male

Hair colour: Jet Black

Looks: A description of your character's physical attributes. Describe hollow mask here as well Must be at least three lines

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Personality: He is suffering from the lack of respect he gets from his peers. Thus he is a very strong and sometimes slow moving Captain. He always try to prove himself worthy on the battlefeild and that has caused him to have great knowledge compared to others he had gotten to work with under the lead of the Captain Commander. He mostly acts alone or with his Vice-Captain. He is a powerful type of Shinigami his skills mostly are melee based. He is slower than all the other captains but swings his blade faster than all the others.(Note he would still be faster than an Lieutenant.)

Likes: Girls,Money,Riding

Dislikes: Power Hungry Shinigami,Cocky Shinigami,Worthless Shinigami

Crushes: There Hair,Eyes, and the determination they have in there duties.

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Skills/Abilities: Master Swordsmanship Specialist= He can handle his own depending on the target., High Spirt Pressure= Even for a low ranked shinigami Jaden would have an abnormally high Spirt Pressure.



Specialties: (Lying)He is rather good at making people belived things that are untrue.

History: Jaden was once a normal kid trying to live in Kakura Town. He began having vicious and horrible dreams since he was twelve and he began to feel weird at school. He felt as if he would never be able to get these wicked thoughts out his head. One day he was riding the bus down to the Highschool when he noticed that a weird creature was stalking a girl named Pheonix. he began to follow the creature but to his shock it was the same creature that haunted his dream, he picked up a sharp stick and trew it at the beast but it fazed through. Jaden could not believe his eyes. The creature had roared and began to charge at him. To his surprise the beast stopped. It hand been smashed completely into the ground. Jaden had used his ablity to destroy the creature.

After years of training it Jaden got very very different. The ablity slowly ate away at his personality and had consumed him. Jadeb became so hositile that many began to follow him. They formed a gang known as the east side kamis. This name was made based on the rumors that some of the members had gained supernatural powers. Since that day he left that gang and lirked trying to find his place in this world. He lost these ablities however at the age of 24.

At 24 Jaden was once a powerful man, he had the money, the cars, the wemon, he had it all. Jaden was a great Baseball player. He had it rough when he was a kid but he knew that with hard work and effort he could do anything he wanted. He got so good in fact he never missed a homerun. He found out that he was going to be voted the most valuble player of the year. Thus mr. ego was born. He was overly confident in his ablities and had become a legend of the diamond. People began to call him Blade Knight because he was considered galliant.

However Jaden died at the hands of his maneger. He was shot in the face at the end of the world series. When he came to the S.S he was a very skilled swordsmen. Jaden first began his duty a a shinigami he was estatic. He worked hard for his Captin and always tried to do his duty. But when jaden had to go to the human world. He was transformed. He secretly detested the humans for being helpless and frail. He hated protecting those who could not handle a hollow. But none the less he respected his Captins orders and would help those he needed to help. He also is cocky only when he talks about the 8th division. He loves to boast how the 8th has the greastest Captain. Years lator Jaden decided to train for a chance to be captain, or Lieutenant of the 8th.


Rp Sample:
Jaden had walked for what seemed like days to the large open feilds that lay outside the S.S. He had be searching for a partner to help him train his new kido he wanted to try out. Jaden could not believe how high these feiled where however. For if you happened to be there you would notice the air is rather thin and it was hard to breath. Jaden peer over to a large open area with a minimum amount of grass. He smiled a bit as he stood there in the middle breathing in the rare air that surronded him.

If only there where some kido I did not know about? What shall this one be. Defensive or Offensive, Enhancer or Sealing? Jaden could not decide what to do with this new kido he had wanted to learn. He slide his arm out and smiled, looking at the tattos that covered it from countless kido releases. He knew he could make a good weapon kido today.

Jadens experience as the former Kido corps captain allowed him to have a already vast knowledge of Kidos. He had used every kido to its maximum potential. He wanted to push his kidos further however. He wanted to make one that would be high level and could help him out of tight situations. He knew today his training would pay off.

Jaden raised two fingers pointing them slightly above his head. "Sokuryoku no Ba-suto!!" With that said an heavy aura formed around the top of his skin. It was Cyan and it reflected the sunlight. He took a step and wildly flew from range. He moved too fast for him to control. He smiled however and Raises his other hand above his head. "Binshou Zetsumei-Kobushi"

His upper body became abnormally muscular. He looked around and moved extremely fast toward a rather large boulder. He reached back and Punched the boulder completely shattering it. He looked around the feild and saw many boulders scattered around. He flew forward and launched a barrage of kicks and punches at the multiple boulders. Satitfied he thought of how to increase the techniques potential. He knew that the cantation had to be short so he could use it in a pinch. He focused his reitsu more untill it hit its peak.


Jaden felt his massive amounts of energy flux as he moved. It swished to his desired body parts ands he gracefully destroyed each boulder. He then stoped moving and he lost form returning to his normal self. "I have to upgrade the lasting time for this technique." Jaden jumped back and slowly headed to the center of the feild. He looked around and He noticed he had no objects left to destroy.

"If i am to get stronger i must head to the canyons. I am sure it has lots of objects for me to train on. Now what would be the best route for me to head?" Jaden felt unsure about his destination. He decided that he alone would have the desire to continue deep into the beast filled caves that layed in the west. Jaden turned and continued slowly toward the west mountains. He was unsure if it was a hundred precent safe however.

When he reached the canyons he felt a disturbance in the air. He knew this area was overflowing in reitsu. Jaden could only smirk as he spoke the words. They striped the flower of all of its petals. Deliver the tears of forgotten Metal.Saying this Metal begins to accumulate in the Air. Twenty metal balls form in the air and Rush into the area that he soon pointed to. The Burst into the mountains side and leave imprents on it. This attack was not good enough for Jaden. He wanted to max out its capabilities. Jaden began to try and add more reitsu to his attack but it back fired and sent him flying backwards.

"What in the world?"As jaden tried to stand up he doppled back and fell down. He had injured his ribs and could barly move. To surprise Jaden had smiled. Jaden had gotten what he wanted. Expect for the fact that the attack did not work yet. Jaden forced himself to stand as he looked outword. He laughs and then trys to regain focus. "Hmmm its time."

Jaden steps back and begins to let his reitsu flow freely. He then constricts all of it into his hand. It began to burn him and he was wincing in pain. This would be Jadens only offensive ablitiy. Jaden began to tear up as more and more reitsu began to flowinto his hand. He then pointed to a bird in the sky and says. They striped the flower of all of its petals. Deliver the tears of forgotten Metal.

Saying this Jadens cracks backword sending him 20 meters backwords. He can barley move but he is able to lift his head up. He looks and is able to see that there is a large hole in the wall that lay to his left. The attack had changed though. Instead of sending the metal balls toword the object it sent metal spikes. The attack was unstable and he had to fine tune it.

"So much Power"Jaden is able to regain his footing and stands up all the way. He is able to Focus his retsu into his arm this time. He makes the energy flow through out his entire body. He then constricts the energy back into his hand and increases the amount of retsu. He laughs as he is ready to realease it. He then changes it again by powering retsu into his entire left body. He cranks the retsu to deadly levels and a small rabbit nearby dies from the spirt pressure.
He calls out the new kido chant.

They striped the flower of all of its petals. Deliver the tears of forgotten Metal. Bodunpao!
Saying this a giant metal ball,covered in spikes, is shot out of his arm. It collides with the moutian and makes a giant whole straight threw it. He smiles as he takes one of his emergency pills. He is restored. He then thinks about how to make it stronger. He thinks of it and starts to focus his retsu back into the left side of his body. He smirks a bit at how much power he is letting flow. He charges his entire left side and then uses the newly developed kido.

They striped the flower of all of its petals. Deliver the tears of tarnished Metal. Jaden began to convert the attack into an enhancement. He used it to make chains shoot out his back. He screamed out in agony and walked backwards. The chains floated above the ground and where erecting from his now exposed upper body. He could nothold in all of this pain inside. With a flick of his spinam lcord he was able to move the chains,controling them to his will. He smiled a bit as he lost this form.

They striped the flower of all of its petals. Deliver the tears of tarnished Metal! Jadens body turned a solid gray. Bones fluttered out of his back. They turned into Adamantium chains, six to be exact, these chains attached to his lampathic system. They where controlled like he would control the rest of his body but instead he decided to go on a harder plane of control. He felt the power blooming inside of him and he shunpoed to the left. He began to build up reitsu and fired off many kidos from the tips of these arm like back chains. (Think doctor octopus.)

Jaden then used the chains to wield spirtlike swords he swong them around but he felt that this was a nunessersary kido and he decided to shape it into another style. He looked into his mind and remembered a very special thing about himself. He knew his main focuse was to create a kido that held destructive powers, yet could be used as an illusion. Jaden disperesed from that form and returned to his normal human self.

He looked up into the sky and then his spear began to desend onto the earth. As it hit the ground he sighed and lifeted it up and sheathed it. He walked away from the gaint canyons he had made by his kido training. He then yelled out in anger and frustrated he left and returned to the S.S.
They striped the flower of all of its petals. Deliver the tears of forgotten Metal. Akumakami!
That said metal spikes balls began to fly around him. They spun faster and faster untill he jumped out the way.He was gonna have to fix that. The made a tiny tornado which smaked into a tree and obliterated it.

He smirked as he returned to his normal state. He looked at his pocket and then arose again. He lurked around the back of the area. He smiled and raised three fingers in front of him. He focused on the bloodstream. He began to feel cold and he breathed inward. His moleucules began to freeze over and turn a cold metal. His eyes widend as he turned blind. His blood pumped faster and faster. He breathed out as metal parrticles formed over his tounge.

"What in the world!!!" Jaden looked around his heart racing fast. He could not believe that his kido turned him blind but he then noticed somthing wonderful. His other scenes where sharper and more advanced. He could smell,taste,and feel, all of his surrondings. He felt his hand be gan to turn sour cold. His skin turned metallic. It was magnisum a flexible metal substance. He could steal uses his organs. Apparently it only effected some of his organs and he was able to form a sharp balde out of his arm.

Confusing... information on your entire app. THough I realize its not done yet.

Considering your age in comparision with your story wouldn't you be younger than most Shinigami. The timeline for your story would seem like you passed away sometime in the last 30 years in the real world (Between 1970 to 2009) while most of us in our prevous lives don't explain anything as lavish as your history. (Which is why its better to write Rukongai History)

What headmaster are you referring too. There are NO headmasters in the Bleach Universe. Maybe ranks that you consider as such. Like Captain Commanders, other captains, Proctors of the Shinigami Academy. Its the same thing with partners. What partners are you referring too? (Vice-Captains??)

There's no need to mention "powerful type" of shinigami. All captain level shinigami are understood as such. You mention that small line as if you are more special than any other captain. Same thing with also being understood that any captain can hold their own without bankai too. It's understood that most captains should. As long as you aren't specifying that you can handle any opponent at a uniquely proficient bankai level and you can stop them at just or shikai. Because you'd be mistaken.

Other than some of those trivial notions I mentioned, its okay. Just fix the problems I highlighted in bold. I'd say add just a tad bit more history but if you're going to add an RP sample then your history is fine where it is.

And sorry....Haven't properly introduced myself. My name is Monty (IC: Haruki Seieichi, Captain of the 13th Division/Grand Commander of the Shinigami Military: Kido Corps Division) Welcome to the forums... ^^

One question: Which division are you applying for??

If you read any of history...or attempted to you'd knew it was the 8th

Yes, but the rules signify to state it up at the top. Makes it easier on the mods and everyone else.

I will do the edits but on a nother bleach site the C.C was reffered to as the Headmaster sorry about the mix up and the other thing you mentioned confuses me a little. Are you sayin my age needs to be lower or higher?

Im sorry my rp sample isnt as long as i could have made it.

The age thing is trivial. No one knows the equational value/significance of the ages of characters in the Soul Society. I was just making a point.

For example
My character is 19 in appearance but his actual age is that of at least 189
While yours is 24 and 300+.

So I'll say for semantic sakes that my character died in the real world as a child. A LONG TIME AGO. At least back in times where basketball or cars didn't exist. Yet your character does. However your character is wayy...older than I am. Despite the fact that I've been a shinigami longer. That's the point I was getting at. You don't have to change it. I was just making an observational opinion.

In any case. Your RP Sample gives you necessary amounts of information to infer an approval. So APPROVED. For my cohorts as well as for everyone else's sake....please specify the squad you're in. (8th is it) after that place your appropriate rank stats in your signature.

And get to work on that zanpakuto. ......

So any of you got admin powers id like to be added to the 8th and given my captainsy O.O

Nope.. thats the CG for ya.. only Baraku Taichou.. can do that for you.

ok then i get it so ill just strat rping then if thats ok

Yeah just go ahead. I can add you to the 8th Division but I can't make you group moderator if you're a captain. Only our founder has that power.

Welcome Aboard, Captain!

Yar, lol i had things to do at diffrent places T__T

But im back now, i also here Bara is back as well

Indeed he is...