Haruki Seieichi - Shirokiyoi Hageshii-ten (No Approval yet needed)

I think you have a point there, SS89.

1st Ability - disentegrates souls
Don't see how useful this would be unless it is used against Pluses that haven't been sent to the Farplane Soul Society yet. And I should mention sending Pluses to Soul Society is a Shinigami's job, instead of destroying the Plus completely. Unless you have some other use for it?

2nd Ability - fires Cero-like blast that traps opponent for 2 posts
Kido-like ability. Fine. But "2 of the user's posts"...does that mean yours? [ex) Haruhi's 2nd ability post -- my post -- Shizuku's post -- Haruhi's post -- my post -- Shizuku's post -- Haruhi's post(where I am set free)] And is the person trapped completely immobile?

3rd Ability - spike pierces enemy from the elbow(?)
Nothing to add. Sounds fine...as long as the only purpose is to pierce enemies, and it can be blocked.

4th Ability - whip
Sounds fine as well, as long as the whip acts like a whip, or at the most like Makie's ribbon.

5th Ability - kido cannon-blast, extremely powerful barriers
Aya aya...how destructive is the cannon blast, and how powerful are the barriers? Does the barrier act like Danku [I think that was the name], the Kido that blocks all others under #89?

6th Ability - offensive Hierro
Well, if Hakuda is Reiryoku + Hand-to-Hand Combat, making it similar to Hierro...sounds fine. I guess.

7th Ability - clones, able to use Zanpakuto and synchronized
Limit on how many clones, and does each have equal power as the original, or is the power divided? [ex) 2 copies have half the amount of reiryoku the original has, 4 copies have one-fourth, and so on] 50 Haruhis with the same power as the original seems like god-modding...

8th Ability - speed ins increased by x1.2, strikes people's insides
Speed increase is fine, but striking people's insides...LIMITS! Can't have a Tyki Mikk go around and make grabs at people's insides. There should be limits...

9th Ability - corrosive liquid that melts away spiritual energy & practically anything
What SS89 said.

10th Ability - exploding playdoh
Fine, I suppose.

11th Ability - enter other bodies and destroy it [can be resisted w/ reiatsu]
...at least this ability has concrete limits. [CAUTION: DANGEROUS FOR ANYONE UNDER CAPTAIN-LEVEL]

12th Ability - creates alter-dimension, large shadow acts as portal
...gotta see about that. What is exactly in the alter-dimension?

13th Ability - completely resistent to "unconventional-based attacking (via reiatsu-influenced attacks)"
Need to know what the last part actually means. If it is "completely resistant to all attacks that come from people with weaker reiryoku than I", it's God-Modding...I think.

14th Ability - right arm becomes metal, can be used for defense, and fire kido-cannon blasts
Defensive metal arm is fine, but what about kido cannon blasts? Is it any stronger than ability no. 5?

15th Ability - pierce psyche of others, rendering victims incompaciate victims
The last time I checked, "incompacitate" and "victum" weren't even words...and again, there should be restrictions. Mental attacks without any restrictions is like giving Haruhi Lelouch's Geass.

16th Ability - steals other's powers to manpulate reiatsu
GODMODDING...is all I have to say. Especially if the victim loses the power to manipulate reiatsu permanently, and this ability doesn't have any restrictions.

17th Ability - blocks out everything
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(ㅇㅁㅇ)?!

18th Ability - implodes himself in energy that can destroy Seireitei several times over
If it's only plot-related, and Haruhi is gone after the implosion, I guess it's fine.

One last problem is this Zanpakuto, instead of having one Shikai and no Bankai, has 18 different "stages". Every time you go up a "stage" the spiritual power/pressure/destructive capablities of each ability increase, up to the point where it causes Armageddon. So we can think of this Zanpakuto as having 18 "releases"...

Well, my 2 cents :3

The way you put it kensei, it makes the 12th ability sound like what nova can do... or possibly the old bounte in the arc...

Look at what Monty said wrote:12th Ability: A di-chromatic pattern appears and overshadows Haruki's left arm. His arm is completely transparent. Haruki control a large shadow miles in diameter and when targets are held by side shadow they are devoured by it and forced into somewhat of another dimension. The shadow is created by an inverted rate of Haruki's own reiatsu. Oddly Haruki's arm is considered as the shadowed embodiment of this ability. His spiritual pressure jump in the process to accumulate his overall amount of power.

I don't think I'm half wrong.

Shadow_Skill89 wrote:I had a question about ability 9... If you secrete a solvent that cn disolve spirital energy itself, then why doesnt yours dissolve aswell???

I see everyone has been talking about this. Thank you for rekindling the topic, Joey. That solvent is a derivitive of my character's own spiritual pressure. (Thought I mentioned that) So it's kind of hard to melt what it's made up of now is it.

And god Kensei....I did want point outs for changes but not allusions of insults just because one effect/ability might sound too outrageous (not that you're outright insulting me but still)

That 12th ability is based on (again) an Angel introduced in Neon Genesis Evangelion. Where the Angel's true body was a large shadow that engulfed large masses of area at a time. Whatever it ate was stored in the angel's shadow "A diachromatized sphere that was believed to be the angel's true body which is how it tricked its enemies. The area in which objects were engulf is basically the psuedospace effect (space folded with in space) that is created by an inverse AT field given off by the angel. The same applies to this ability..where an inverse of spirutual pressure is used to do the same.

Where layers of spirutual force is pressed inwards...expanding real space and creating this false storage. Yes...there is apparently science behind this reasoning as well. ^^;

I will admit that I wanted its size to be comparable to that of the actual source it was based upon but I should get real at least on that part. To scale the shadow created on the ground wouldn't be any larger than maybe a football field and a half. (If not slightly less). And I didn't deny nor did I concieve that escaping from this space was impossible. So what ever your brain happens to think of that will get you out (that is somewhat sound) then it'll probably work.

Alright took me a while to read everything but I'm glad you went over everything. I will break each one down but I would like to mention. Pleading my case on the weapon and all...Each one has an overall general ability with no denial of rather each technique can be stopped, blocked, escaped or such in any manner. Just as an RP player each person should know their limits faults and what (to some degree of logic and fair play) can be modded out of.

Ability One: It is literally an attack. It isn't based off its original source entirely (since Adam never shows up to attack) and it is based on a combination of one series of anime and a fan-fic that involved a character that used the ability. If you've heard of a little series called "TheSoulTaker" and the main character's signature attack "Lightning Breaker" which destroys other mutants from the insider out but litterally [and you guessed it] reaping their souls. As far as most formidable enemies go this is just an equivalent of Raikoken if anything (Save for it covering the entire arm upon useage and being close and long-ranged).

Ability Two: Literally a sealing ability. And again it's not based off the original source. It's based on a secondary attack the main character in "TheSoulTaker" employs. i.e. Sonic Cross. And it's two of the user's posts. Being two posts in general would be mook point wouldn't it? Since it end right after the next person's post. Infact any thing other than "user post" unless it's 4 or more is retarded. Anyways considering what it's based upon this post is useless against any race other than shinigami. And if we allowed humans, bounts, quincys, and any character in a gigai it would fail. It only works on souls. As for Vizards and Arrancar...if you're an espada or knight or any class just below or above it and you can't break this. You're either not thinking outside the box or your have "hurt me issues". Especially with my characters over all reiatsu only being 1/9th it's overall maximum. :/

Ability Three: Based on the first actual angel attack and appearance. The angel's ulna It's just a drill press like energy weapon that extends from the back of Haruki's arm. Needless to say it has some knockback. Otherwise the ability would be pointless. And like I said, overall, I never mentioned that it couldn't be blocked so why shouldn't it.

Ability Four: Think steel cable in addition to what you conclude to be like Makie's Ribbon.

Ability Five: I'll mark this as one of the more controversial ones. But this ability was based on one of the more controversially badass Angels. Ramiel. The angels two primary defenses was a highly concentrated electromagnetic burst as well one of if not the most powerful AT field next to the 17th Angel. And considering the field was strong enough to block out the first shot of a gun that was powered by 3 cities, I'm sure I can translate the notion of it being able to stop all kido up to 89. So yeah....That should have been enlightened upon (instead of me saying it can just create powerful barriers)

Ability Six: I supposed you covered it. So subverted

Ability Seven: Um...I specifically remember saying only 2 clones can be created. And not clones in a matter of speaking. But Haruki himself is split into two forms (so that's not cloning. Each twin is apart of Haruki's original make up.) And I supposed I figured that there would be some notion of split the reiatsu but definitely not the effect of the overall abilities of the zanpakuto. If both parts wanted to use the same ability it would happen. I mean it's not going to be a Prism of Seven beatdown if that's what you were thinking.

Ability Eight: Limits...On that? Dude I was going to have a character that can bypass soild material and strike people's insides via phasing. So um...I don't know what you're getting at. Besides hasn't it always been our policy to I don't know...um....Dodge? That's the equivalent of taking a blade swing into your stomach and slicing you open. If you don't want to get hit...move. There all there is to it. Not saying that you should dodge like everthing but still. I don't see how it bypass any site ethical limits.

Ability Nine: Subverted. Already explained it.

Ability 10: Subverted.

Ability 11: Subverted

Ability: 12: Subverted

Ability 13: This ability was based on several of the 11 to 14 series angels from show. It's supposed to be on a play concerning the way this angel attacked. Which was by inhabiting an Eva in which it's AT field allowed it to be completely resistant to other Evas save for Unit .01. In any case it's for a short period of time and by the time this ability is used. Haruki is at 3/5th his overall power. Let's do the logic here. At that point he should only be affected by any other character's reiatsu that exceeds this point (What's sad that at that point it's not that many characters). Other than that it's only a 3 user post limit so jeez. Unconventional will stand for any attack that is reiatsu based I will note. (Can't believe no one caught the meaning) So I will admit a limitation or a clause. Reiatsu based attacks can and do more often than not...exceed the ratio of energy one character has. So here's an idea...Even if you are weaker, use an attack saturated with enough energy overwhelm this ability. (I as well as your character should be the judge on rather it would do anything or not). I'm sure if you want to Gran Rei Cero Haruki or anything just below or above it's equivalent, I'm not going to just up and say: "That didn't work, HA HA HA."

Ability 14: Isn't it kind of obvious that it' kido cannon effect is much much larger than Ability 5. I'll make it easier in it's description. The fifth ability function as a precise high intensity laser effect. The 14th one...functions as a much larger implosive effect. It's an attack, guys. (Litteraly an attack) in stories I've seen people get out of crap that is supposed to be 1 and a million inescapable (Looks at nee-chan and her Reverse Twilight Cero). This litterally gives you and idea of the area of effect you're going to be trying to run away from. (i.e. A very very large one)

Ability 15: Understood that there is no drawback really to this one. So have to initate one (Just a little bleh at the moment to think of one)

Ability 16: Again... Like 5th, 10th, 11th, 12th and, 13th this is based on a very powerful Angel and I wanted to maintain something to the effect. In the series the Angel (Armisael) basically has no physical form and is just a giant strand of energy which changes forms in order to attack with it's overall body including constricting its victum to absorb all life from it (including Evas) from the inside out. The effect was translated to suit that of a zanpakuto and this is how it turned out. For like the ump-teenth time. This is bakudo basically. And regardless of my reiatsu at this time it wouldn't influence how much power I can charge into this one ability. If you can break it it with enough force then do so. (Jeez) If you sit there and let it suck the life out of you...go for it.

Ability 17: Yes...It blocks EVERYTHING. At this point in time if I'm ever forced to use such an effect I'm in serious ass trouble...Someone has to be beating to epic proportions. And this is the point in time where my reiatsu stops serving SPECFIC functions and pour out ridiculously at a constant value. Two examples: Think....the rushing of water. The more of it there is (regardless of speed, gravity and only inertia) in a constant direction the more force it has. Of course with that in mind I'm thinking of a force of pressure a billion times greater than that of flowing water. And pressure that breakes over 1.2 billion times that of Boyle's combined Pressure law would be enough to block out light, sound, and everything.

---Example Two: If you've read it or seen it in action think of an inverse effect of the ability of Kaibyakuhoshii (One of the zanpakuto used by Haruki during Hado 99) The etheral force this ability creates is like taking a part of space and shutting it off completely. (Instead of rupturing it.)

In any case. What makes the ability fair is that you as well as I are completely closed off from one another. Completely....close off. I can't touch you and you can't touch me. So yea... What should be noted is that if this were ever to happen you might want to get away by a few...I don't know...thousand kilometers. Considering my character is barely over 500 points away from his maximum power. The ability is sort of a coccoon in prep for attack. The ability is based on the angel with the strongest AT field in the series (So strong it blocks out all forms of energy)

Ability 18: Okay...I will adjust this because it really is broken as shit...maybe. But seriously...If I'm forced to use this I'm fighting shinigami hopped up on PCP, Mountain Dew, Steroids, and angry notion of getting through masterbation only half way. And this ability kills me too so yeah (And attack required all of ones reiatsu unless someone was there to feed you some and I don't see how when things are busy going explodie.) With that in mind this is the Superweapon's "striking fear" effect. No one wants this bomb to go off. Like any other mass panic superweapon so again...I don't see why this shouldn't stay. However if ppl want this to be changed I'm up for it.